T1 Writing


We are learning to...
  •  write a personal recount about something we have done or experienced
Criteria:
  • have an opening statement that tells who what and when
  • write the events in the order they happened
  • have a conclusion or personal response

Football

Last Thursday the 20th, Room 3 went on the field. On one side of the field was the girls and on the other side there was the boys. The girls played Hunters. This is how you play. Someone chooses the hunter and the rest of the children were possums. The hunter tried to get the possum's tail and if they do, they become a hunter. If you go out of the cones you automatically turn into a hunter. After Hunters, we played a real game of football. There were blue teams, yellow teams and even green teams. I was in the blue team with Emma and some people from another class like Room 4. I felt happy because we played football.

Teacher comment:
Well done for describing how you played the games. You have a good beginning, middle and ending to your story and I like the words you used like automatically and 'a real game'.

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